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Masked Feelings CH 88 Bend Until You Break
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Alice detested having a shadow, but this was going to be her life from now on if something wasn’t resolved. She was surprised that Tony allowed her to leave town. She expected him to stop her when she boarded the plane, but it never happened. It was obvious rather quickly why he let her leave, Alice was being followed and Tony wanted her to know that. She hadn’t heard from him since she left, but she knew he would call soon. Tony wanted to make her squirm first.
Dana didn’t look all that well when Alice saw her. She looked pale, but maybe this was because she was wearing black. Alice stood next to her the whole time during the grave side service, holding her hand. Even in bad times like this, Alice could feel how right it was to be with her and being with her now just reassured those feelings. She wished she knew for sure if Dana was really ok and that nothing had happened to her. This man that was in the same room with Dana in that video was now watching them both. What kind of message was Tony trying to send?
When the it was all over, Dana stayed until the others were walking away. Her family was the last to leave. A few people offered condolences to Sharon before they left. No one came up to Dana, which she thought of as odd. She knew that she was the grand-daughter but still couldn’t understand why everyone seemed to avoid her. Somehow the mood had changed from the church to here. She guessed it didn’t matter, Alice was by her side now and that’s what she really needed. She was always there for her and truthfully, she didn’t know what she’d do without her.
Sharon called after her, but Dana said she wanted to stay a few more minutes. Alice said she’d give her a ride back to the motel. She was thankful that Dana hadn’t seen the look Sharon had just given her for saying that. Though she hadn’t said anything, Sharon didn’t need to with the look. This was a look that she obviously perfected with years of experience. She wasn’t a woman that tolerated much and was very hard to please. It was a miracle that Dana didn’t turn out just like her.
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Yes, I still trust you and thanks again for the warning. But it DID NOT help. I am livid at the entire situation with the bastard Tony who again violated A. HE WHO HURT DANISH MUST DIE. I almost wish that A never should have gone to see D. My god, I hate the way D found out about A falling apart in the shower. It was so horrible. Please let A tell D the truth. They so needed to talk. I have to ask myself again, would this nightmare ever end? If Tony could send a man to watch A & D, so could Kristen. I appreciate the current liaison between Kristen & A. I would send you a “Save Danish Army” if I could. Please give them help asap. You have shocked me beyond belief. I guess that is an indication that you are doing another terrific job with this story. Thank you for providing A the morning after pills. At the rate things were progressing, A definitely would require a constant supply. And this is not a joke. Taking the medicine would not be good for her health. Really do something soon, PLEASE????!!!!!!! What the hell was David doing all that time at the hotel? Taking a nap? Or he liked the fact that Tony was torturing A. David couldn’t be everywhere and recruited help? lol. I was getting scared when learning David was at the same hotel. And I swore the man who A bumped into was David. You definitely surprised me. Then there was the will. What a shocker it was that Gracie leaving her estates to D. Leaving the bible to Sharon led me to believe that she might have done something horrible to someone when she was younger. Maybe her father? And I believe that it was an act of revenge on Sharon’s part. I can’t wait to find out the story behind it. Last but not least, our poor Roxy. The thoughts of hearing the sounds of the rats gave me chills down my spine. You are so bad. That was pretty evil of David to show the footage of her old house. I can’t help but feel sorry for Roxy at this point. I am still wondering what was David’s motive for doing all these shitty things to Roxy. IMO, she was already pretty broken. Again, I will have to wait for the master to return for another update. THANK YOU VERY MUCH brteyes!!! Brilliant as always!
Im left so angry at this chapter!! Yes i hate Tony even more and my heart breaks for both Alice and Dana! Onto the beginning thou, i still love tht Alice was there for Dana at the grave side service.You have also left me even more curious as to what went on between Sharon and her mother. After the convo with Kristen im not surpised Al was left feelin worse anyone wud, and even dirtier to knowing ur possibly puttin the person u love at risk to becus of some wanker than raped u! I feel sorry beyond belief for Alice becus it must be so hard not to be able to hold the person u love so much without being caught out for something that has happened yet cud potentially ruin everything for her. Then we come bak to prick Tony, he is vile and discustin to treat Al like tht and find it a turn on! Wen u kill, which im hoping u will :) Possibly David cud i mean he was at the motel for some reason anyway make sure Tony death is slow and painful and maybe humiliating for him to! Im so curious and worried as to how things will turn out next chapter with Dana finding Al in such a vunerable state like tht, reli was hard to read ad heartbreaking. Onto Roxy, again reli curious as to know wat was in the box and do feel sorry fr her she isnt gettin it any easier and having to relive somethng as awful as her childhood is unthinkable. However angry i may be at the events of ur story it is still beautifully but darkly lol written and still i love it as much as i hate it if u get me lol. Cnt wait for ur next post as much as i may regret sayin tht wen i read. Bring on some happy Danish soon :) lol. Brilliant and love it thou well done yetagen on ur fantastic wrting. PPS x x x
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Whoa…. Thank God that Dana found the marks on Alice. Sooner the better. Alice cannot take this anymore! I just hope that Dana will understand that Alice was doing this for Dana’s sake and to protect her. Dang… I don’t like that Danish is getting beat up by David and Tony… Time for some revenge. Uhmmm–maybe Dana will try to erase Tony’s mark. But then again, that will make the matter worse, because Tony will see that Dana has marked Alice hers. What a fucking dilemma. Can’t go East, West, South, or North. I am really curious about the story behind Sharon and Gracie. Hmm…. And seriously, a montage movie for Roxy? Come on, you evil David. Somehow the footage reminded me of the movie ‘Ring.’ I don’t know why…. I guess the video tape in Ring is bits combined too. Wow…. I think David is doing this to Roxy, because Roxy was one to kill Lara. Right? But why the hell not let her go! She’s been through enough. I pity her……By the way, I’ll go as one of the “Save Danish Army!” Just give me a call. :) I really really hope that Dana doesn’t get emotionally broken down. Maybe the fact that she found Al in the shower sobbing would give her an impression that Al was a victim of the situation….. Really hope that she realizes Al doesn’t have any feeling for Tony except some animosity….. :) Great work, as always… Your story is so vivid; I can feel it! PPS PPSPPPSPPSSPSPSPPPSPPSPS O, and about what people think, I think not that they do not like the story or the matter it touches. But that they have not been commenting, that they are shy to do so…. I mean look at your story! It’s already chapter 88!!! It took me some courage to just cut in and start commentin…. But tell you what, we readers very very very appreciate you and your work. Yes, indeed, very much. :) Please post soon, brteyes!
Gah. OK. So first I read the Author’s Notes and now I am concerned that something did happen to Dana. Maybe drugged or poisoned? I do have an idea why Tony wants the baby, but, it is way out there. But, then again, I could be dead on with it. There are many bad people in this story, but, Tony is pure evil. Please let Alice tell Dana what is going on and please let someone other than Dana take care of Tony. I am really concerned that Alice is going to lose her mind. How much can one person expect to handle? And Dana is like the only anchor she has and she might end up losing it. Dana inheriting the estate is an interesting development. Seems like the relationship between Sharon and her mom was even colder than hers and Dana’s. I am glad Alice has Kristen. Thank goodness for that morning after pill. It was probably also good advice for Alice to not be intimate with Dana until she gets checked out. I just hope Kristen isn’t still interested in Dana. Poor Roxy. She is being put through hell and has the added “bonus” of never knowing when it will end — since no one would be looking for her. And what was in the box? You know. I actually find myself looking forward to the day when Danish just has David to fight. I will probably regret saying that, though. This story can be extremely hard to read and if it wasn’t so incredibly written I might have given up. You do an amazing job telling the story. Thanks, brteyes!!
Alright, I’m catching up. You’ve been on my ass for months about reading your story and with everything going on, I just haven’t had the time. Well I’m certainly making up for it this week. I don’t think Tony is nearly as sick as David, although he’s far more direct. David is a bit of a mastermind and Tony is lead by his cock. If it came down to it, Tony has more resources, but David is far more clever and is much more of a force to be reckoned with. I’m not sure how Lara factors into all of this, as far as who is sicker, not to mention Roxy, who is also quite cunning, but my money is still on David for the sickest fuck award. I might actually want to throw your name in the ring as well, considering you’re the one that envisioned all of this in the first place. Maybe there’s a reason in live in a place that has more cows than people :-) Perhaps Gracie was the one to abuse Sharon. That would certainly be an interesting twist on things and I know how twisted you like them to be. It would also explain why she is so homophobic, other than that brief glimpse in season one of her being attracted to a girl and turned down. You’ll let us all in on the secret in your own damn time and nothing is going to steer you of that.
Damn, that was a very intense chapter. Fucking Tony deserves to be killed slowly. I can’t stand this guy. Now you have no other chance but to write me into this story so I can kill him off. Please!!! Until now I thought that David was the real psycho here but as it turns out it’s not him but Tony. Such a bastard. I don’t know why it’s such a pleasure for him to humilate helpless women, in that case Alice. Maybe he has some childhood issues? His uncle Bobby was humilating him or his mom? That would explain why he’s wanting to show his power to everyone, especially to physically weak people like Alice. Oh God, I hope Al won’t get pregnant from him This would be just horrible and I’d go out of my mind. Don’t let it happen, please….Did you count how many times I’ve said please already? lol Now that Dana has seen the bruises and marks all over Alice’s body it’s gonna be difficult for Al to be secretive with Dana. How will she take it? Is she going to leave Al? Damn, I need more happy Danish here. Turn Al and Dana into killers and let them be the hunters in this story. They suffered enough, don’t you think? Come on….I know you’re a softie and prefer happy Danish over anything else. I should join a anti Tony and David club. Who wants to be a member of it? lol How did you come up with that chapter name? Bend until you break? Is there anything you want to tell us, brteyes? It sounds a little dirty to me, lol. Now to the good part in this chapter. I am happy for Dana that she inherited the estate from her grandma. She deserves that, even though she has enough money to buy herself more than 100 of such houses. Gracie’s wish was that her house shall stay in the family. I can picture Dana and Al with two little babies in there. And they should live there until the end of their happy lives;-) Alright, that was my take on it. You like it? lol But as I got to know you so far you’ll bring in more hurdles and obstacles for Danish. I have no doubt that they will get out of it stronger than they were before. So was I right and Lara’s still alive? Oh my God, that only will add to the drama and angst, lol. We need a SWAT team or Superman. Yeah, I’m for Superman or even Superwoman. She’s hotter anyway, lol. What was in that box that Roxy held in her hands? Something that reminded her of her past? You better reveal it soon. I’m curious, lol. Why do women have to suffer in your story? It should be the other way around. There are way too many psychos out there and most of them are guys. Brteyes, you have to get rid of them, lol. And….please free Roxy. She’s more of use when she’s outside again although she’s another threat to Danish. Well, I didn’t post because I was busy with my life, especially my family. I promise that I’ll post soon though. I think, it’s unfair that I can’t have Dana. Why can’t I make out with her? My girlfriend doesn’t need to know that, lol. It could stay our secret, hmmm? I’m sorry, that I couldn’t proofread this time but I’ll be around for your next chapter. That’s another promiseJ And forget it, I won’t be writing you a story about those rabbits. This is just crazy. I don’t even know how they’re having sex, lol. The only thing I know about is that female rabbits can’t stand each other, they have fights and harmony is a foreign word to them. I could write a story about that if you want me to, lol. I hope you’re writing on your next chapter already, brteyes. I’m eager to be finding out what will happen next. Your mind is brilliant, darlin’. I’ll await you next week with another post, lol. You think you can make it? Love your work so PLEASEEEEE continue writing. Hope you hade a nice weekend and a safe trip. You’re amazing…keep up this magnificent masterpiece.
It’s great to see you back, brteyes;-) I do have a sadistic side because I’m here, right? The truth is, I’m a very kind person. I wouldn’t kill a fly, well only if it drove me mad, LOL. Now that I know that you’re having a gf I better stop flirting with you. She could get upset with me and with you. You’re being bad for flirting back, lol. It’s a pity you are attached. I’d like to have a date with you. Wanna call me when you’re single again? I liked this chapter although it was very dark this time. I don’t doubt that you have a happy ending for us in store. When can expect your next post? You better hurry. I’m having more questions for you. 1. What inspired you to write this story? 2. Is it hard for you to write it and do you enjoy writing the angsty parts the most? 3. Does your gf read your story? 4. Why are you bi? LOL That is my favorite question btw;-)) PPS brteyes and delight me again. Fabulous update as always, my dear.
She is not his whore!!!!!!!!! omg why would she leave dana’s side, leave the room. Tony is a frickin asshole..i dnt know how they can go back now..she should of just told her no matter what omg i hate him so much so so so much great writing :)
wow wow wow I’ve just caught up on all 88 chapters!!! This story is amazing, reallly damn hard to read sometimes but it challenges me and I like that. Forces me to realise that people are as fucked up as this, well maybe realise is the wrong word but either way I feel so much for people and couples who go through experiences like rape and loss and come out the other side, battling through all those demons. I thought Roxy was evil to her core until Tony’s recent antics, it’s just disgusting, soul destroying stuff!! I really really really hope Alice can tell Dana, I think it’s what they need, when they communicate they work so much better together. Maybe they can find away to get free from all of this, just them… I crave Danish fluff though I have a strong suspicion that you’ll leave me hanging!Thank you for writing such a thought provoking story!! xx